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Model: anthropic/claude-sonnet-4.6\par
Accepted for editing: 2026-08-23T15:38:56-05:00\par
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### STYLE\par
The style of the novel is in the style but not substance of Ken Follett. Each scene is in third person from the perspective of one of the characters.\par
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### LEXICON\par
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### STORY\par
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### CHARACTERS\par
Andy Hayes\par
Father and husband. Manages the team at American Airlines out of the Fort Lauderdale Airport that services its jets. Is a union member with nearly 30 years of experience. Scratch golfer. Large extended family, two brothers and a sister live nearby. Tall and handsome and very attractive to women in general. A leader of men.\par
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Elikapeka Hayes\par
Wife of Andy Hayes, of Hawaiian origin. Stay at home mom. (eh-lee-la-PEH-ka)\par
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Ella Hayes\par
Oldest daughter. To be a high school senior. Highly skilled golfer looking for a college golf scholarship. Tall, haughty, proud, smart. Prefers male friends to female friends. Has never dated and rarely attends parties or after school activities other than golf. Taught golf primarily by her father, a scratch golfer. Daddy\u8217?s girl. Usually impatient with others and likes to play fast.\par
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Alex Carpenter\par
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### RECALL\par
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### PREVIOUS\par
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### NOTES\par
Hayes house \u8212? The Hayes family lives in a two story house built in the 1960s on a deep water canal (meaning, the canal can be used for boats going out to the Atlantic ocean). The house has a boat dock, rented out to a friend who has a fifty foot sailboat. The house has a small pool in the backyard which is often used by the family for gatherings.\par
Pompano Beach Golf Course \u8212? A frequently played course with Andy and Ella. Two eighteen hole courses, the shorter and easier Palms course and the longer and harder Pines course.\par
It is late May, 2000. No one has cell phones yet.\par
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### BRIEF\par
The first scene of the book is told in third person from the viewpoint of Ella Hayes. It is the first weekend after the end of Ella\u8217?s junior year in high school. She\u8217?s a skilled golfer and has been taught to play from a very young age by her father. It\u8217?s Saturday, and like most Saturdays, she\u8217?s planning to play 36 holes of golf with her father. On this Saturday, they will be joined by a father who teaches his son in the same way that Andy teaches Ella. Ella and the boy, Bobby, are on their high school golf team, both are the best golfers on the team. There is no romantic interest between Ella and the boy; they are friends but their relationship is mostly just a shared interest in golf.\par
It\u8217?s early on Saturday morning, more than an hour before their tee time, and Ella is anxious to get to the course. They have the first tee time at 7:24AM, as both Ella and her friend Bobby like to play fast, and the best way to play fast is to be first on the course, dew sweepers, they are often called. Her father is dawdling over a second cup of coffee. Ella likes a long warmup, whereas her father usually hits a few wedges and a few drives and is good to go. There is always tension between her and her father to get him going.\par
The other daughters aren\u8217?t even up yet and Ella has finished her breakfast that her mother prepared and is ready to go. She dearly loves her father but wants him to get off his butt and go to the course RIGHT NOW!\par
At last they leave the house, their clubs in the back of Andy\u8217?s old pickup truck. They arrive at Pompano Beach Golf club and she finds her friend Bobby already having paid and waiting for her inside. She pays for herself and her father with his credit card. They exchange some snarky comments and then proceed to the range to warm up.\par
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### DIRECTIVE\par
Expand this scene to a maximum of 1500 words and don't exceed the BRIEF. Keep the dialog tense until they arrive at the golf course.\par
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### SCENE\par

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